For those curious about my NaNoWriMo’09 production, here it is…I hope you like it!
Aline Martins
Synopsis: Where do dreams go?
Jenny is still upset about loosing the best storyteller she ever met, her grandma.
To make things even more difficult, they are moving to her Grandma’s old house, at least -she thinks – she might find someone to tell her grandma’s stories.
But she has no idea what kind of friends are waiting for her in a house where the doors are as huge as giants and the rooms always lead to magical places.
And for my curious friends!
Excerpt
When she got the key, she looked around, and the only thing she thought about was picking inside the room once more. “One more time” she thought “just one more time”.
And she opened the door.
“Granny?” Jenny murmured, taking in shallow grasps of the cold air.
“Do you want to play with Granny?” A said a soft voice with glee.
Jenny stepped inside the room, closing the door slowly at her back. “I won’t take long, and nothing can happen” she thought.
Suddenly, other voices joined the first one, all of them whispering at the same time,
“Jenny, we know you are here, we know you are here”.
“Who are you?” asked Jenny choking, this couldn’t be a joke.
“Jenny, my darling” said a very familiar voice.
“Granny?” asked Jenny.
“Did you come to hear new stories Jenny?” the other voices joined what seemed to be her grandmother’s voice.
Terrified, she tried to run away, but she tripped over something and fell to her knees.
“You’ll never get out of here Jenny,” said one of the voices.
“This is where they send you when they don’t need you anymore” another voice said.
“You don’t want us anymore Jenny, you put us here to forget us, but we want you”, they said in unison.
Jenny thought she could feel cold hands around her wrists, holding her, while she could hear her granny’s voice behind all the others, and it said “be careful, my dear, you should not enter the fairyland without following the instructions”.
The other voices were still around her saying “We want to play, we want to play”.
“Granny?” Jenny shook all over trying to get rid of the cold and the fear that was making her choke as if all the objects in the room had their hands and fingers on her.
But, just when Jenny became convinced life was over, and there was nothing else she could do, a whirlwind escalated and suddenly disappeared.
Jenny was confused, she could not figure out where she was, or if she was standing, floating or lying on the floor, all she could feel were the cold and the weight of the silver key on her hand. She closed her eyes for a while, trying to forget, only listening to the sound of her heart.
When she opened her eyes and looked around, she was not in the attic anymore, but in her bedroom, lying on her bed, holding something so tightly in her hand,something that was hurting her. The key.
by Aline Martins
novembro 12th, 2009 at 11:53 PM
Oooo sounds very interesting Aline! Can’t wait for you to finish so I can edit!
novembro 12th, 2009 at 11:58 PM
I am so happy you liked it…(it means A LOT) at least now you have an idea of the kind of work you are going to face (poor you LOL) about 50,000 words of this
novembro 13th, 2009 at 5:33 AM
LOL, bring it on! It’s enjoyable work
And your writing is very good 
And to be honest, from this bit here, I don’t think it will be as bad as you think/are hinting :p I notice that you have a couple words here and there, where I think you meant other words – take your first sentence for example. You have “When she got the key, she looked around, and the only thing she thought about was picking inside the room once more” and I think you meant “peeking” not “picking”? Because to me “picking” would mean more that she needed to pick the lock to get the door open, and you’ve stated she has the key, so picking the lock isn’t necessary. And the other sentence I noticed with this would be “’Granny?’ Jenny murmured, taking in shallow grasps of the cold air.” Where you have “grasps” and I think you meant “gasps”.
Oh look, I’m in editor overdrive mode already hahaha, oops
But seriously, rest easy if you’re worried I’ll have trouble – with a lot of the people I’ve interacted with that have English as a (very fluent) second language, it’s mainly just odd little things like a putting a very similar looking word in the sentence instead of the word they wanted, or it’s just a rather literal translation that ends up being very formal sounding, or slightly out of the “normal” order.
And now I’m rambling and possibly over explaining and going waaay off course, so I’ll end this comment now. Keep up the great work! *HUGS*
novembro 13th, 2009 at 7:23 AM
LOL, thanks Lore, you are great! and be sure, I’ll never be offended with edition, for several reasons.
but mainly because I am going to learn with it!
And, of course, as NaNo asks us, I have not edited anything (at all) yet > <
But, as soon as you have some extra time, let me know, and I’ll send what I already have here.
thanks dearest friend!
**HUGS**
novembro 13th, 2009 at 3:51 PM
Hehehe, that’s a good attitude towards it
I’ve met people who get very upset over stuff like this *grimace*
Hehehe that’s half the fun of NaNo :p (It’s also why I held back on going, “And you’re missing punctuation here, here, here and here in your lines where someone is speaking.” LOL)
Sweetie, right now extra time is almost all I have in some people’s eyes hahaha. If you want to send some through, go right ahead. If you want to wait until NaNoWriMo is over so you can do some editing before I see it, do that too. It’s your story, and I’ll be happy to see it when you feel like sharing
novembro 14th, 2009 at 8:44 PM
It’s really good!
I stumbled upon your website while trying to find from where I copied a NaNo WriMo pep talk and I started staring at google results asking myself: “uhn, did I published it somewhere and just can’t remember? (I usually sign just as Aline Martins and I’m a writer too). No, it’s not possible, I only keep blogs, not sites” lol
Good luck with your story^^
novembro 15th, 2009 at 10:33 AM
Hi Aline… Martins LOL
good to have you around… are you at NaNo too? where are you from?
Hope you keep visiting the page